First, there’s no guessing needed. I thought it was in-your-face-plain that terrorists were responsible for starting the outbreak in Oasis.

Second, an ideology? What ideology? That terrorists do bad things? I thought that was pretty much common knowledge, and why we call them “Terror”-ists. Are there Middle Eastern terrorists? Well, that’s a well-established fact. Do I even imply that everybody from the Middle East is a terrorist? Of course not. Do I imply that that everyone with olive skin is a terrorist? No. The hero (Corbin) has olive skin because his mother was from Spain. Now, are there bigots out there that do assume that olive skin=Middle Eastern Terrorist? Yes. As a matter of fact Corbin has problems with some of those type of closed-minded characters, starting in the VERY NEXT CHAPTER.

Let me put it this way: the terrorists in Oasis are a plot device, not a political statement.

However, if this chapter “offended” you, then its probably best you don’t keep reading. You will most likely be incapable of enjoying the story.

“a language I didn’t understand”

Let me guess: the “terrorists” created the zombies. I sense an ideology I don’t want to delve into. I don’t think I’ll continue reading.

Oasis is the ongoing story of an ER nurse’s struggle for survival in a city besieged by a zombie apocalypse. This link goes to the first chapter. There are currently 15 chapters available….

The story line has my interest,
buy I’m wondering where the main character is coming from. He’s just witnessed something potentially sinister happening, yet he isn’t going to the police to tell his story? Generally a nurse would have a good relationship with law enforcement, and would be rushing over to tell his story to the authorities. Medical folk are into the established order like that. I feel like there needs to be a bigger overriding reason for not cooperating with the cops other than just being tired. He needs to have an internal dialog that shows us why he is doing something other than what a normal, law abiding, establishment-trusting, medical professional would do. Either there needs to be more character development before he makes this decision, which would have prepared us for this un-herd-like action, or we need more access to his decision-making to understand why he is not cooperating with the authorities in an apparent emergency.

Also, when he “wonders” where the two guys from the trailer went, it would seem that he would need to do something more powerful then just “wonder.” He had just witnessed something very strange, been kicked in the guts, and stuck a guy with a needle full of brown stuff; If I were him, I would be bloody mad, bloody scared, and a little more than “wondering” where those two freaks had run off to. He should be more than “curious” all the time, as well. Curiosity did kill the cat, but a “what the ****!” situation calls for more than mere curiosity.

Anyways, just a few thoughts. I think the story tone is good, it just needs to be tightened up a little bit because some of the language does not ring true to my ears.

I’m interested where the next segment will take me!