Comments on: Oasis: Chapter 13

By: Ballsack McNasty

Ballsack McNasty — Fri, 23 Oct 2009 13:35:45 +0000

Ha, I kept wanting to read ahead every time you put “Nothing.” I was thinking to myself… “It’s only nothing for so long!”

By: SMEAR

SMEAR — Fri, 13 Mar 2009 20:20:30 +0000

You have a thing about the 3rd floor, huh? Everytime you mention a floor in your story…it’s always the third. I guess it’s some Freudian thing.

By: Stephanie

Stephanie — Wed, 30 Jan 2008 22:11:07 +0000

Ok, if you’re going to send this to a publisher, your “best best” (or best bet) would be to work on you’re spelling more. Like, watter (I’m assuming, it’s meant to be water? lol). I’m sorry for being so negative in my comments. But dude, please pay attention to your spelling and give more descriptions, it makes the story SO much better!

By: Barton G

Barton G — Thu, 05 Jul 2007 00:14:31 +0000

In a way, the anticipation of waiting it out makes the chapters extra good. Good work.

By: Andrew

Andrew — Mon, 18 Jun 2007 05:16:02 +0000

Excellent job; a good take on a classic story.

By: Emerson Vella

Emerson Vella — Thu, 14 Jun 2007 03:26:17 +0000

Is there any more to come man? I keep revisiting the page once a week hoping for more but…

Well, good luck to you with your writing. Please dont keep us on our toes!!

By: will

will — Thu, 31 May 2007 20:31:50 +0000

holy crap! your wok is amazing! send it to a publisher! I swear it rocks!

By: Emerson Vella

Emerson Vella — Thu, 24 May 2007 22:44:05 +0000

Dude, that is SICK! [Edited] amazing!! Can’t wait for more to come man

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