Comments on: Unfinished novel, Chapter 2 http://www.storyhack.com/2008/08/29/unfinished-novel-chapter-2/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 08 Feb 2012 04:53:53 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: DarcKnyt http://www.storyhack.com/2008/08/29/unfinished-novel-chapter-2/comment-page-1/#comment-4743 DarcKnyt Fri, 29 Aug 2008 16:28:21 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/?p=294#comment-4743 I still think this has potential. I liked some of the words you used ... and touché, I had to look up "mephitis". :) We're even. I would LOVE to see you transform this just a little into that noir-narrative, first-person style of the hard-boiled books. I know I've said that before, and you said no, and all that, but it'd be big fun. So, when you've posted the final blue-paper portion, will you continue it? Or just let it go? Have a happy holiday weekend, too. :) I still think this has potential. I liked some of the words you used … and touché, I had to look up “mephitis”. :) We’re even.

I would LOVE to see you transform this just a little into that noir-narrative, first-person style of the hard-boiled books. I know I’ve said that before, and you said no, and all that, but it’d be big fun.

So, when you’ve posted the final blue-paper portion, will you continue it? Or just let it go?

Have a happy holiday weekend, too. :)

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