Comments on: The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 4 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 28 Jul 2010 23:31:45 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: Chad http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-6133 Chad Thu, 01 Oct 2009 13:41:20 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-6133 Great Story so far Bryce!!!! Great Story so far Bryce!!!!

]]> By: Toothy http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5819 Toothy Tue, 28 Jul 2009 15:55:24 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5819 Cliffhanger, yet again... Cliffhanger, yet again…

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5140 Bryce Beattie Fri, 20 Mar 2009 17:00:45 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5140 DarcKnyt - You mean follwong isn't in your dictionary? DarcKnyt – You mean follwong isn’t in your dictionary?

]]> By: DarcZombie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5133 DarcZombie Mon, 16 Mar 2009 17:03:11 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5133 Great work Bryce! Keep it up! Great work Bryce! Keep it up!

]]> By: girl http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5131 girl Sat, 14 Mar 2009 20:12:58 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5131 good! good!

]]> By: Zombit Hobbit http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5128 Zombit Hobbit Sat, 14 Mar 2009 00:00:58 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5128 I look forward to these every Friday. Keep up the great work! I look forward to these every Friday. Keep up the great work!

]]> By: DarcKnyt http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/comment-page-1/#comment-5115 DarcKnyt Fri, 13 Mar 2009 20:16:44 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/03/13/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-4/#comment-5115 Excellent. A breather, a touch of foreshadowing, and a cliff-hanger. What else is there in pulp, I asks ya?? Awesome, bud. Couple of typo alerts: <i>Martin was gone from sight. Before I knew it, I could see a bright spot of daylight at the top of an exit ramp. There was no gate on the way out, just a line of two or three <b>card</b> waiting to enter traffic.</i> "Cars" here. <i>I scanned around to see if Martin was <b>follwong</b> in his car, or maybe if he was running for the ramp.</i> "Following" Another brilliant chapter. I can't wait for this to really start hopping. Has some great elements I want to see come to fruition. Nice job again, B. Excellent. A breather, a touch of foreshadowing, and a cliff-hanger. What else is there in pulp, I asks ya??

Awesome, bud.

Couple of typo alerts:
Martin was gone from sight. Before I knew it, I could see a bright spot of daylight at the top of an exit ramp. There was no gate on the way out, just a line of two or three card waiting to enter traffic.
“Cars” here.

I scanned around to see if Martin was follwong in his car, or maybe if he was running for the ramp.
“Following”

Another brilliant chapter. I can’t wait for this to really start hopping. Has some great elements I want to see come to fruition.

Nice job again, B.

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