Comments on: The Journey Of St. Laurent, Chapter 7 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 28 Jul 2010 23:31:45 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: Ballsack McNasty http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-6212 Ballsack McNasty Wed, 28 Oct 2009 13:45:54 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-6212 I am skeptical, but I will keep up the support. I am a zombie fiend, but aliens? We'll see... An error I caught: -“He read what you delivered, and then he came back on and apologized. He want to organize a-”- He WANTS to organize. Keep it up! I am skeptical, but I will keep up the support. I am a zombie fiend, but aliens? We’ll see…

An error I caught:

-“He read what you delivered, and then he came back on and apologized. He want to organize a-”- He WANTS to organize.

Keep it up!

]]> By: Kristy http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5727 Kristy Fri, 17 Jul 2009 15:37:33 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5727 A few things I caught that you most likely would have picked up in the editing process: "...I ended one of his addictions when ran away from home on my seventeenth birthday." Toss in an 'I' up there between 'when' and 'ran.' "...From the day the Declaration of independence was signed..." Capitalize 'Independence.' A few things I caught that you most likely would have picked up in the editing process:

“…I ended one of his addictions when ran away from home on my seventeenth birthday.” Toss in an ‘I’ up there between ‘when’ and ‘ran.’

“…From the day the Declaration of independence was signed…” Capitalize ‘Independence.’

]]> By: Rob Smith http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5394 Rob Smith Sun, 10 May 2009 15:50:10 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5394 It's still as great as ever Byrce, and that's coming from a kid who isn't really keen on alien stories! Did notice something though: "a passport in the name of same Makis Kasim" Should that be 'some' and not 'same'? It’s still as great as ever Byrce, and that’s coming from a kid who isn’t really keen on alien stories!

Did notice something though: “a passport in the name of same Makis Kasim”

Should that be ‘some’ and not ‘same’?

]]> By: Zombie Hobbit http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5190 Zombie Hobbit Tue, 14 Apr 2009 09:31:13 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5190 I hope your ok, Bryce. Having trouble with the chapter 8? I hope your ok, Bryce. Having trouble with the chapter 8?

]]> By: Zombie Hobbit http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5175 Zombie Hobbit Tue, 07 Apr 2009 18:38:58 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5175 Well, I used too, but they made me stop after several people where seriously hurt. Actually Bryce, I live in Vermont, we don't have any big box stores. Lol. Well, I used too, but they made me stop after several people where seriously hurt.

Actually Bryce, I live in Vermont, we don’t have any big box stores. Lol.

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5174 Bryce Beattie Tue, 07 Apr 2009 17:58:25 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5174 Darcknyt & girl - thanks. Zombie hobbit - don't you hop around in big box stores? Glenn - I think it's probably more like a conspiracy against fun. Darcknyt & girl – thanks.

Zombie hobbit – don’t you hop around in big box stores?

Glenn – I think it’s probably more like a conspiracy against fun.

]]> By: Glenn http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5170 Glenn Tue, 07 Apr 2009 10:24:00 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5170 Bryce, I apologize in my lack of support for your new book. I'm at work most of the time and for whatever reason, the gov't has decided that I am no longer able to access Story Hack there. I suspect that it's a conspiracy to keep me from learning "the truth". Just kidding, I'm not that nutty. I just wanted you to know how much I'm enjoying your sequel and to tell you as I used to: GREAT STORY MAN, KEEP IT UP!!! Bryce,
I apologize in my lack of support for your new book. I’m at work most of the time and for whatever reason, the gov’t has decided that I am no longer able to access Story Hack there. I suspect that it’s a conspiracy to keep me from learning “the truth”. Just kidding, I’m not that nutty. I just wanted you to know how much I’m enjoying your sequel and to tell you as I used to: GREAT STORY MAN, KEEP IT UP!!!

]]> By: girl http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5168 girl Tue, 07 Apr 2009 04:34:04 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5168 Holy crap! That was good! Holy crap! That was good!

]]> By: Zombie Hobbit http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5167 Zombie Hobbit Mon, 06 Apr 2009 22:32:59 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5167 Another great chapter, Bryce! You have a great writing talent. One typo that I can see "Yeah, but I don’t hop at Walmart. I, uh… don’t believe in it." *Should be shop at Walmart. Unless he really does like to hop, but prefers to do his hoping at smaller family run stores. lol Another great chapter, Bryce! You have a great writing talent.

One typo that I can see “Yeah, but I don’t hop at Walmart. I, uh… don’t believe in it.”
*Should be shop at Walmart. Unless he really does like to hop, but prefers to do his hoping at smaller family run stores. lol

]]> By: DarcKnyt http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/comment-page-1/#comment-5164 DarcKnyt Mon, 06 Apr 2009 17:22:22 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/04/06/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-7/#comment-5164 Wow, a great entry! The announcement of the existence of extraterrestrials is going to be a shock felt 'round the world! Brilliant job on this, B. Wow, a great entry! The announcement of the existence of extraterrestrials is going to be a shock felt ’round the world!

Brilliant job on this, B.

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