Comments on: The Journey Of St. Laurent, Chapter 16

By: Georgene

Georgene — Wed, 29 Jul 2009 23:09:19 +0000

I can’t wait for Fridays!☺

Toothy — Tue, 28 Jul 2009 18:54:47 +0000

I feel for Corbin; he’s taken such a beating over his journey… :O
Keep up the great work.

Jordan Johnson — Sun, 19 Jul 2009 13:57:26 +0000

awesome. Another great chapter and good ending.

girl — Sat, 18 Jul 2009 06:13:56 +0000

GREAT CHAPTER!

I tried to be one of the smart people who find typos, but the only one I could find was –

“When I hit the release button, If you can give as many of them a ride out of here as you can, I’d appreciate it.”

The “I” in “if” should be lower-case.

Glenn — Sat, 18 Jul 2009 04:09:54 +0000

Excellent chapter Bryce!! Poor Corbin, that poor guy just CANNOT catch a break!! Keep up the great work!!

Sasquatch — Sat, 18 Jul 2009 01:52:45 +0000

Sweet man! It keeps getting better and better!

RobSmith — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 22:04:46 +0000

Ahh, another brilliant chapter.

Poor Corbin..

DarcKnyt — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 16:49:32 +0000

Oh, Corbin … you make life so much harder than it has to be for yourself … *groan*

Nice work, Bryce. Tight, concise movement of the story. Excellent job!

Just one thing …

He deserves pain and suffering in spades, but he’s the only person in the world that might be able to leas me to what I want.
Typo here.

Can’t wait for next week!

DarcZombie — Fri, 17 Jul 2009 14:40:17 +0000

Dude this is awesome! Way to go!!