Comments on: The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 19 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 08 Feb 2012 04:53:53 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-12928 Bryce Beattie Thu, 12 Aug 2010 04:44:56 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-12928 The online version was my first draft. In the printed book, it was west nile virus. The online version was my first draft. In the printed book, it was west nile virus.

]]> By: RayMAn x http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-12927 RayMAn x Thu, 12 Aug 2010 04:36:21 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-12927 heY BryCE iN oAsiS yOu saID thE terOrisTS weRE givING FaKe fLU ShoTs nOT WesT NiLE viruS heY BryCE iN oAsiS yOu saID thE terOrisTS weRE givING FaKe fLU ShoTs nOT WesT NiLE viruS

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-6300 Bryce Beattie Mon, 16 Nov 2009 17:42:54 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-6300 Hey Jared, long time. Can't wait to see you guys (& meet the rest of your kids - it's been forever) on Christmas. Hey Jared, long time. Can’t wait to see you guys (& meet the rest of your kids – it’s been forever) on Christmas.

]]> By: Jared http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-6289 Jared Sun, 15 Nov 2009 02:11:55 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-6289 Bryce, Just trying to get caught up on Corbins adventures. Great chapter by the way. I really enjoy reading this stuff. One comment on this one though. I'm not any kind of editor or anything but I didn't notice it mentioned by the others here. “You all have a nice day.” The long haired attendant thrust the two grocery bags of food onto Michael’s lap and smirked. Texas locals tend to say "y'all" keep it up bro. Bryce,

Just trying to get caught up on Corbins adventures. Great chapter by the way. I really enjoy reading this stuff.

One comment on this one though. I’m not any kind of editor or anything but I didn’t notice it mentioned by the others here.

“You all have a nice day.” The long haired attendant thrust the two grocery bags of food onto Michael’s lap and smirked.

Texas locals tend to say “y’all”

keep it up bro.

]]> By: Ballsack McNasty http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-6215 Ballsack McNasty Wed, 28 Oct 2009 15:31:04 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-6215 Still got me wrapped up. -“Oh, one more thing. Is there a pharmacy around here, or a medical supply house, that might still be open? One that might have supplies for diabetics?”- There is no need for the comma after the word "house." -I also told London about the convoy, and the hospital.- Also, no comma needed after the word "convoy." Still got me wrapped up.

-“Oh, one more thing. Is there a pharmacy around here, or a medical supply house, that might still be open? One that might have supplies for diabetics?”- There is no need for the comma after the word “house.”

-I also told London about the convoy, and the hospital.- Also, no comma needed after the word “convoy.”

]]> By: RobSmith http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-5940 RobSmith Sat, 22 Aug 2009 18:37:21 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-5940 Good work Bryce! Only thing I saw wrong was "The each boy held a shotgun." Good work Bryce!

Only thing I saw wrong was “The each boy held a shotgun.”

]]> By: DarcZombie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-5932 DarcZombie Wed, 19 Aug 2009 23:47:41 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-5932 Rock on Bryce. I love this man! The story is progressing so nicely I can't wait to add this one to Oasis! Rock on Bryce. I love this man! The story is progressing so nicely I can’t wait to add this one to Oasis!

]]> By: Jordan Johnson http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-5923 Jordan Johnson Sun, 16 Aug 2009 01:50:01 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-5923 another great chapter. But I noticed one typo: The each boy held a shotgun=should be each boy held a shotgun. Oh and for the record I'm Irishking from Twitter..lol another great chapter. But I noticed one typo: The each boy held a shotgun=should be each boy held a shotgun. Oh and for the record I’m Irishking from Twitter..lol

]]> By: Sasquatch http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-5922 Sasquatch Sat, 15 Aug 2009 16:31:00 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-5922 Sounds like the calm before the storm! Another good chapter man, keep up the good work. Sounds like the calm before the storm! Another good chapter man, keep up the good work.

]]> By: girl http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/comment-page-1/#comment-5921 girl Sat, 15 Aug 2009 02:55:22 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/08/14/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-19/#comment-5921 hmmm...good!! The last commotion at a hospitaL didn't turn out too well for our hero! hmmm…good!! The last commotion at a hospitaL didn’t turn out too well for our hero!

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