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whoot great new chapter! Hopefully London can kill whatever that thing is. Another great one Bryce! Have a good weekend
Nice man just something I noticed though “At last until weâ€™re out of gas” It should probably be “at least”.
Woo! Tension and excitement! This is a great edge-of-the-seat thrill ride installment, Bryce! So great to see Corbin back in action. A nice job of moving the pulse up; it’s like you didn’t miss a beat. Bravo!
And now your favorite part — albeit brief this time:
I slammed on the breaks.
This is “brakes”.
“Its shooting at us!”
This is the contraction form “it’s”.
Awesomeness abounding; can’t wait for the next one. 🙂 Hope all Beatties are well.
Good grief Bryce!! You sure know how to leave us in suspense now don’t you!! Loved the “Space Avocado of Death”!!! Keep up the great work!!
Ha! Space avocado of death! Never could have thought of it…
I don’t like the taste of avocado
I was expecting a Wicked Watermelon of Doom, but I’ll take the avacado.
Everyone else caught all the errors I found… save one.
“Yeah, great pla- Corbin, youâ€™ve got to see this.” — While we all knew what the case was here, this is incorrect. It can almost be considered a run-on sentence. Maybe have London do something in between? For example; “Yeah, great pla-” London was cut off by something that caught her attention. “Corbin, youâ€™ve got to see this.”
Until next time.
Good to have you back! Hope you had a good Turkey Day. Enjoy your Christmas with your family! I look forward to reading more when you find time! Thanks for entertaining me!!!!
Heyy man this is really great stuff! Read through Oasis last night, was so hooked I havent slept for almost 48 hours! Got my way through this one today too! Nice work!
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