Comments on: The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 26 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 08 Feb 2012 04:53:53 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-10173 Bryce Beattie Sat, 23 Jan 2010 06:48:26 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-10173 He'll be back Monday. I miss him, too. He’ll be back Monday. I miss him, too.

]]> By: Georgene http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-10171 Georgene Fri, 22 Jan 2010 23:17:04 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-10171 Ok, Merry Christmas, Happy New Year, Happy Birthday...it's already the end of January and where is Corbin? Is he dead? How could he possibly have escaped? where oh where is Corbin. Come on, now, Bryce, BACK TO WORK! :) Ok, Merry Christmas, Happy New Year, Happy Birthday…it’s already the end of January and where is Corbin? Is he dead? How could he possibly have escaped? where oh where is Corbin. Come on, now, Bryce, BACK TO WORK! :)

]]> By: Sarah http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-9661 Sarah Sun, 03 Jan 2010 09:26:00 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-9661 This is good, it reads well & has a fairly fast pace. You have varying sentence lengths which really helps it to read well. My Mum is doing a writing course, and that's one thing that she has taught me from it: you need to vary sentence lengths. I used to think that all sentences should be as short as possible to keep the pace up, but that's not true - so I have to go back and edit the book I'm writing now ;) (I also want to change my story to first person like yours is, it clearly works quite well and puts the reader completely in the feet of the protagonist). This is good, it reads well & has a fairly fast pace. You have varying sentence lengths which really helps it to read well. My Mum is doing a writing course, and that’s one thing that she has taught me from it: you need to vary sentence lengths. I used to think that all sentences should be as short as possible to keep the pace up, but that’s not true – so I have to go back and edit the book I’m writing now ;) (I also want to change my story to first person like yours is, it clearly works quite well and puts the reader completely in the feet of the protagonist).

]]> By: Kelli http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-9164 Kelli Wed, 30 Dec 2009 18:49:18 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-9164 I'm a newer reader... and I just got caught up. I have to say, I have loved Oasis and The Journey of St. Laurent. I've never been a zombie or aliens fan, but I'm totally hooked! Your writing style is wonderful, and you are very articulate. I hope you have a very happy New Year, and I can't wait to see what happens next! I’m a newer reader… and I just got caught up. I have to say, I have loved Oasis and The Journey of St. Laurent. I’ve never been a zombie or aliens fan, but I’m totally hooked! Your writing style is wonderful, and you are very articulate. I hope you have a very happy New Year, and I can’t wait to see what happens next!

]]> By: Noah L http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8912 Noah L Mon, 28 Dec 2009 17:37:16 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8912 I hope you enjoyed the holidays, and I hope you have a wonderful new year that includes a lot more of this story! After all, I'm really hoping for zombie aliens :P I hope you enjoyed the holidays, and I hope you have a wonderful new year that includes a lot more of this story! After all, I’m really hoping for zombie aliens :P

]]> By: Tyler http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8872 Tyler Mon, 28 Dec 2009 11:08:48 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8872 Happy new year to you and your family mate! Thank you for another amazing chapter, loved how the frantic nature of the chapter urged you to read faster and faster! Very clever! Happy new year to you and your family mate!

Thank you for another amazing chapter, loved how the frantic nature of the chapter urged you to read faster and faster! Very clever!

]]> By: girl http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8435 girl Fri, 25 Dec 2009 07:00:08 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8435 Great chapter! I think I held my breath through the whole scene. MERRY CHRISTMAS! Great chapter! I think I held my breath through the whole scene.

MERRY CHRISTMAS!

]]> By: Glenn http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8329 Glenn Thu, 24 Dec 2009 13:45:41 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8329 Hey Bryce! I want to wish you and yours a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. I hope that the new year brings nothing but success for you! This was a really fun chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next!! Glenn Hey Bryce! I want to wish you and yours a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. I hope that the new year brings nothing but success for you! This was a really fun chapter and I can’t wait to see what happens next!!

Glenn

]]> By: LewisB http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8316 LewisB Thu, 24 Dec 2009 11:49:45 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8316 Just thought I'd pop in to say Happy Christmas and I hope you, your family and all your readers have a great holiday, and an even better New Year :P Looking fowards to learning WHO the aliens are, or WHAT they want :P Oasis and Oasis II will always keep me guessing :D Just thought I’d pop in to say Happy Christmas and I hope you, your family and all your readers have a great holiday, and an even better New Year :P

Looking fowards to learning WHO the aliens are, or WHAT they want :P Oasis and Oasis II will always keep me guessing :D

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/comment-page-1/#comment-8279 Bryce Beattie Thu, 24 Dec 2009 05:51:31 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2009/12/23/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-26/#comment-8279 Thanks for spreading the word. Thanks for spreading the word.

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