Comments on: The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 30

By: D Hulq

D Hulq — Tue, 15 Jun 2010 00:19:25 +0000

Hi Bryce,

I’m not good at tech stuff. Could I submit my non-fiction book in Word to Lulu or DogEar and get their help with formatting, then take the finished product to CreateSpace or Lightning for publication?

Thanks!

By: Unexplained Mysteries

Unexplained Mysteries — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 00:32:05 +0000

You are a really good writer

By: Bryce Beattie

Bryce Beattie — Fri, 19 Mar 2010 17:44:30 +0000

Thanks for those.

By: girl (aka GERMAPHOBE)

girl (aka GERMAPHOBE) — Thu, 11 Mar 2010 05:41:28 +0000

Great! so glad to get back into the story….

One very small item: would a trained medical professional really use a borrowed razor? It would be a shame to survive zombies and aliens just to get HIV or hepatitis…just sayin.

By: Tyler

Tyler — Wed, 10 Mar 2010 00:19:31 +0000

Great chapter mate good to see you back in the game

By: DarcKnyt

DarcKnyt — Tue, 09 Mar 2010 19:08:17 +0000

Oh, good to see this chapter up! How we've missed Corbin and his band of merry followers! Thank you for finding time to do this, Bryce. We genuinely love your entertaining work. And now, for the part you love most: ...so I just crawled the AM, FM, and shortwave bands on the little emergency radio my dad had given me. After two trips through the AM, FM, and shortwave dials I found ... Repetition alert here. Just cut the second highlighted clause and you're good to go. A man made virus. One that spreads itself by taking control killing the host’s brain and seizing control of its body... I think the highlighted portion should be cut; just MHO, of course, but it's awkward right now. At the least a comma between the highlighted clause and the following clause would help. "So you are going to try to meet up?" London bit her lip and I could tell she we making an effort to keep her voice down. "Is everybody there going to be nuts like the guy you were listening to? And wasn’t Alan Jex the jerk that drove you off his radio show?" I honestly believe this ought to be one paragraph of dialog. Just looks that way to my eye. Corbin, They’re a bunch of lunatics. Capitalization problem there. If I was wrong, though, and she really was opening her self up like that, well ... "Herself" Without another words and before I knew it... Typo here. Another great installment, and I love the almost heroic ending with Corbin striding down the road alone and pondering again. Great job, bud.