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The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 32

Author’s note:

For those of you who haven’t read any of the Journey Of St. Laurent before: You are now reading an online serial pulp novel. If you didn’t start at the beginning, you may want to do so. Chapter 1:  Down By The Bay. This serial is the sequel to my first novel, Oasis.As it ends up, getting to see the boss is pretty easy when you’re willing to assault someone. At least, that’s how it worked out for us.

Chapter 32 – The Hostile Hotel

London punched the guy right smack in the middle of the face. He staggered onto his heels and put his hands on his nose.

The other guard brought up his rifle.

I took a step back and raised my hands. “Whoa there, comrade.”

“Hold it right there.”

London threw up her arms. “You’re going to shoot me for punching him?”

“Well-”

She took a step toward the second guard. “Well, what? We both know you’re not. Just get on your radio and tell Jex he has guests.”

The guard stared at us a moment, then took a step back, lowered his gun, and got on his radio.

The punched guard was a bleeder. It took a good ten minutes before he stemmed the flow.

Sure, he’s ready for an alien invasion, but not a nosebleed.

Five minutes after that, a pickup truck pulled up to take us into town where Jex and a few of his lieutenants or commanders or whatever he was calling them were meeting.

The line of vans, campers, and pickup trucks waiting to enter the field was backing up a good quarter mile down the road.

Where are all these people coming from?

We pulled up in front of the only hotel in town. It was a sleepy little place with only a few rooms, a café with big picture windows downstairs, and a wealth of refined old school personality.

The café wasn’t open for business, but Jex and a couple others were in there sitting around a table and pouring over what looked to be maps.

A shot of anger trickled down my spine at the sight of the talk show host. Perhaps I still felt a little offended by the way he had treated me on his show.

We went in the main entrance to the hotel.

The main lobby smelled like cherry and cedar. The furniture looked like it was at least sixty years old, but still in excellent condition. The whole place was a warm step back in time.

To bad I didn’t find this place under different circumstances.

Our guard told us to stay put then threw open the glass paneled door to the café and entered.

The door slammed back shut behind him. The pane rattled like it was going to flop out and break on the floor.

Through the door we could see yelling. All of it directed at our guard. It was too muffled to hear well, but the idea was clear. The guard was a total moron to bring someone out here. Jex stood and leaned forward to get a look at us through the door. He stopped his tirade mid sentence when he recognized me and pushed back his chair.

He was wearing black fatigues with a red, white, and blue armband. He seemed somewhat taller than he had in the studio and he walked toward us with a definite swagger. Maybe he was feeling the rush of power that comes from leading an army of survivalists and lunatics. Or maybe it was just the firearm he had in a holster on his hip.

London leaned over and whispered, “Wow, from his voice on the radio I expected someone-”

I half turned to her. “Fatter?”

She smiled. “Yeah.”

Jex opened the door, shook our hands, and motioned to a sitting area in the back of the lobby. “Can we talk a minute?”

I nearly rolled my eyes. No, we drove the whole way out here just to stare at you. “That’s why we’re here.”

London and I sat on a plush velvet couch.

Jex pulled up a carved wooden chair. “I was afraid you didn’t make it. Word got around about the attack outside of Houston. To be honest, I was shocked that you called. And by the way, that was a really bad idea.”

I crossed my legs and leaned back. “I gathered as much.”

He pointed a finger at me. “Really, you should have known they’d be listening in to my calls.”

“Who, the aliens? How was I supposed-”

“No, the feds.”Jex reached into a pocket, pulled out a pen, and started twiddling with it. “They’ve been keeping the whole alien thing under wraps for years and years, and then I broke the story with just enough detail that they thought I had to have hard evidence. They had no choice but to go public. The thing is, those feds don’t really forgive easily. And of course once the president went on TV, well, why would the aliens operate in secret anymore? So that’s cat’s out of the bag, and they all see it as my fault.”

Man alive, this guy likes to hear himself talk.

London glared at him. “So what is everybody doing in Tennessee?”

“They’ve got a base here with the main entrance one hill over from the camp. As soon as I read where to go in that packet you delivered, I booked the whole hotel and made arrangements for the field we’re using as a camp.” Jex raised his eyebrows pointed to the cooler sitting by my foot. “I take it you’ve got in there what I think you’ve got in there?”

I glanced down. “Yes it is, but go back. You mean a base for the extraterrestrials? Why did we set them up with a base? And why does the government take their side in all these attacks? Why aren’t the Marines here to carry out an attack rather than a bunch of, you know, you guys?”

He stayed focused on the cooler. “You’d better leave that with me until we decide whether or not to use it.”

Unbelievable. “Wait, wait, wait. Not use it? If the aliens are so scared of it that they’ll bomb a neighborhood minutes after establishing a peace agreement, don’t you think we should make their fears-”

“To be fair, I don’t think they know exactly what it is.”

“Well, I didn’t come all this way to hand over the most dangerous biological weapon that has ever existed without knowing exactly how and when it’s going to be used.”

Jex balled up a fist and banged it on the arm rest. “And I’m not going to let someone I don’t trust completely bring something that dangerous into my camp.”

London scooted forward so fast she almost came off the couch. “And didn’t you say that we are already at war? That we needed to fight with everything-”

Jex raised his hands. “Look. I didn’t know if you’d show up. So I started evaluating other strategies. I’m not saying I won’t use it. I’m just saying I want to know where it is in case it comes to that. And we’ll know soon enough if it is going to come to that.”

My nostrils flared. “And how are you going to protect it if they hit the camp?”

“We have more than enough firepower there to take down one of the smaller UFOs.”

“How do you even know that?”

Alan Jex folded his muscular arms and gave me his best ‘I’m in charge here’ look. “It was in that packet you delivered. There was one in China brought down with small arms fire. You just can’t use steel or steel jacketed ammo very well. It gets caught up in the enemy’s magnetic shield.”

“I’m still the only one here that has a full appreciation of what this virus can do. I should be the one to handle it.”

He stood. “Why, because you’ve had tactical training?”

I jumped to my feet. “Oh, and you’ve had medical hazmat training?”

I glared at Jex.

He glared right back.

London grabbed my arm. “Let’s go Corbin. Apparently they don’t want your help.”

I crouched, grabbed the cooler, and took a backward step toward the door.

Jex clenched his jaw and popped his knuckles.

I took another step back. “I could help, you know. You don’t have to control every last thing.”

London gave me another tug and nodded at Jex. “Wish I could say it was nice to meet you.”

We turned and walked toward the door.

“Wait.”

I glanced back.

Jex grabbed the bridge of his nose and shook his head. “All right. Hold on, you two. I’m sorry, things are stressful and I’m not quite myself. You got a place to sleep tonight?”

“Not exactly.”

“Okay. If you want you can stay here in the hotel. There’s an open room upstairs. We can talk again tomorrow after-” Jex stopped himself and cocked his head to the side. “After we both get some sleep.”

I got the distinct feeling that I shouldn’t trust him blindly. However, it was late and sleeping outside on the ground didn’t really appeal to me. Neither did knocking door to door in this dinky town asking for a couch to sleep on. I nodded.

“Hold on a second.” Jex went behind the counter and produced a key. “Room four. I think it’s on the left upstairs.”

London let go of my arm to take the key. “So why isn’t the president on our side?”

“Good question.” Jex shrugged, took one more glance at the cooler, then turned. “Get some sleep.”

The upstairs fit exactly with the lobby. It was adorned with intricate crown molding and antique fixtures.

Our room was larger than I would have expected, but it still only had the one bed.

I sighed as I closed the door and locked the chain lock. “I guess I’ll take the couch. At least this one has a couch. Better than that chair in the last motel room we shared. You know, or the floor of your Dad’s RV.”

London made a point of looking around the room, then turned to me and pursed her lips. “No, we can share the bed.”

I raised an eyebrow.

London gave me a less than half-hearted slap with a very tired smile. “But don’t be getting any ideas. We’ll divide the sheets and sleep burrito style, with your opening facing one side and my opening facing the other.”

I set the cooler on the nightstand, drank as much water as I could and made up the bed according to London’s directions. “You know, this is really more of a taco than a burrito.”

“Shut up. It’s a burrito.”

I finished getting myself ready then crawled into my side. A tiny temptation in the back of my tired head told me that I should be attempting some kind of hanky panky.

London was still fussing about getting herself ready.

Maybe I’ll just close my eyes for ten minutes first, then see how it goes.

I was still in my burrito and laying on my side when I awoke.

Through the squinting I could tell the sun was already up. An extra weight pressed on my hip.

I turned my head and peeled my eyes half open.

The extra weight was London’s leg. Apparently she had abandoned her burrito, stretched out, and claimed most of the bed for herself.

I slid out from under London’s smooth leg, put my feet on the floor, and stretched.

Something wasn’t right.

I scanned around the room.

Why can’t I put my finger on it? What is wrong here?

And then I saw it. Or rather, I didn’t see it.

The cooler is gone. The virus-

An impatient knock sounded at the door.

I jerked my head around to get a look at the door.

The chain lock had been cut and now dangled in two pieces.

My stomach dropped and I started to sweat. It’s gone.

Another knock hammered on the door.


Keep Reading! Chapter 33 is here.

Posted: April 2, 2010
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Comments (13 Responses)

April 2nd, 2010 Chad

Is the next chapter ready yet?! :) Good job Bryce! Im not real good at proof reading, but I will read it again and see if I can find something. Hope you and the family are doing good. I enjoyed the chapter, as I always do! Thanks!!!

April 2nd, 2010 Bryce

Oh, dang it. Somehow I left the best part (the end) off. Check back Monday for the fixed version.

April 2nd, 2010 Major

Really, really good chapter Bryce. Can’t wait for the next installment. Thanks!

April 3rd, 2010 DarcKnyt

“Well, what? We both know you’re not. Just get on your radio and tell Jex he has guests.
Forgot to close the quotes here.

London leaned over and whispered, “Wow, from his voice on the radio I expected someone-
Just a suggestion — and not the first one, I had a lot of ‘em about wording I didn’t make ’cause I’ve never been clear on how you feel about that sort of thing — I’d make this em-dash an ellipsis. An ellipsis indicates a trailing off in dialog; an em-dash (generally) shows being CUT off. The next sentence (Corbin finishing her thought) indicates he didn’t interrupt her, but picked up the line of reasoning. Just sayin’.

I nearly rolled my eyes. No, we just drove the whole way out here just to stare at you. “That’s why we’re here.”
If it were me, I’d cut that first “just”. The second one is better place, adds the tone of sarcasm, and works. The first one is fine too, by itself; but don’t leave both in the sentence.

April 3rd, 2010 DarcKnyt

THE ENDING’S NOT HERE?! WTF are you trying to do, kill us?!

;)

Very good stuff. I love me some gun-totin’ survivalist anti-government Ted Nugent-lovin’ crackpots, don’t you? That’s what makes America great.

Good work on this, B. And now for the fun part. It’s like Christmas every week, isn’t it? Heh. Yeah, I didn’t think so either.

“Well, what? We both know you’re not. Just get on your radio and tell Jex he has guests.
Forgot to close the quotes here.

London leaned over and whispered, “Wow, from his voice on the radio I expected someone-
Just a suggestion — and not the first one, I had a lot of ‘em about wording I didn’t make ’cause I’ve never been clear on how you feel about that sort of thing — I’d make this em-dash an ellipsis. An ellipsis indicates a trailing off in dialog; an em-dash (generally) shows being CUT off. The next sentence (Corbin finishing her thought) indicates he didn’t interrupt her, but picked up the line of reasoning. Just sayin’.

I nearly rolled my eyes. No, we just drove the whole way out here just to stare at you. “That’s why we’re here.”
If it were me, I’d cut that first “just”. The second one is better place, adds the tone of sarcasm, and works. The first one is fine too, by itself; but don’t leave both in the sentence.

…You just can’t use steel or steel jacketed ammo very well. It gets caught up in the enemy’s magnetic shield….
I think the “in” is missing where I’ve indicated.

That’s about it for the … uh … “help” this week. ;) Good to see your stuff back online! Woo! Can’t wait for the next one.

Happy Easter, Bud!

April 3rd, 2010 Jordan

I haven’t read any of the series in a while but here I am! I got caught up and all of them great. Can’t wait until next week…is it me or are the chapters getting longer?

April 4th, 2010 Tyler

Great chapter bud!

April 5th, 2010 pingback
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April 6th, 2010 DarcKnyt

Hey, how’d my comment get split into two? o_O

Anyway, the ending is pretty exciting. Well worth the wait. :)

April 6th, 2010 Bryce Beattie

DarcKnyt – well, it was so great that it couldn’t be contained by one comment alone. I guess.

Jordan – I shoot these days for at least 1500 words/chapter. sometimes it goes a bit longer, especially if it takes me more than one week to get it posted.

April 12th, 2010 Mal

Zombie at the door? ^_^ cant wait for next chapter!!!!!

April 16th, 2010 Maelstrom

Just read to here from the first book, enjoyed it for the most part. I think the thing that really bothers me the most is the fact that even though almost every person Corbin has ever dealt with both books so far has either beat him up, shot at him, or tried to eat him he is still so complacent, mild mannered, and trusting. It seems unreal for the very fact that he isn’t a bundle of nerves, constantly looking over his shoulder, driven to constantly assess everybody he meets as friend/foe and the best way to either kill/maim/disarm/escape them. He approaches every situation as if the story just started, hopeful and lax and constantly puts himself in the most dangerous position he can find in order to help others. He just hasn’t seemed to have grown or changed from his multiple near death experiences, but instead takes everything in stride and assumes that this time they wont try to eat him or shoot him in the face. I guess there was never a real reason, to me, why Corbin survived when the incredibly dangerous virus wiped out 99% of the population. Just dumb luck only gets you so far, and he has horrible luck.

A few things that bothered me (not trying to be critical, just food for thought):

When he broke the terrorist out he was willing to break in a jails door to get in but then just lets the most dangerous man of the decade out of his cell hoping he will play nice, instead of grabbing the Ruger and forcing a location out of the guy from the other side of cell door. It makes it hard for me to really like/respect the lead but perhaps that’s just me.

When he saves London and Mike, it seemed like they just kinda fell in with him a bit too easy. He’s on a potentially dangerous mission to find a terrorist, aliens are shooting people with death rays, left Beth a day ago, and hey, why not, lets travel together. Seriously, you helped enough Corbin, drop that b**ch off at the next gas station and get to work already.

Hope I don’t come off as rude or abusive, just unloading some of the things I was pondering while I have been reading and I guess I have to check back now and again now, since I’ve already read so far and now need to see where this all goes.
Keep up the good work.

April 16th, 2010 Bryce Beattie

Maelstrom – I’m not offended. Those are some good thoughts. There’s a lot of stuff I’d fix if I wasn’t writing and posting this the way that I am. Hopefully, I’ll make this book stronger when I’ve finished posting it and get to the editing phase.

In Corbin’s defense – He’s in emergency medicine. Working as an EMT and as an ER nurse, it’s pretty much life and death every day so he’s no stranger to stress. He knows how to make a decision and move on. He just doesn’t always make the right one.

In my defense – I really don’t have one, but here goes my excuse anyway- It’s pulp action adventure, not “literature”. ;)

Thanks for reading despite the weaknesses. By the time I’m on my fourth or fifth book, I’m going to be awesome… :)

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