Comments on: The Journey of St. Laurent, Chapter 33 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/ Action Adventure Fiction and Other Stuff from Bryce Beattie Wed, 08 Feb 2012 04:53:53 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Nicole Carleton http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11247 Nicole Carleton Wed, 12 May 2010 20:24:01 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11247 You're not a slacker! Everyone's entitled to take a break once in a while. You just write too good a story & everyone's eager for more! :) You’re not a slacker! Everyone’s entitled to take a break once in a while. You just write too good a story & everyone’s eager for more!
:)

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11202 Bryce Beattie Fri, 07 May 2010 16:28:48 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11202 I know, I know. I'm a slacker. It's almost done, though. I know, I know. I’m a slacker. It’s almost done, though.

]]> By: Nicole Carleton http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11194 Nicole Carleton Thu, 06 May 2010 15:10:40 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11194 Chapter 34? Chapter 34?

]]> By: Shae http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11187 Shae Wed, 05 May 2010 14:42:19 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11187 Also, I forgot to mention, I absolutly loved the named baseball bats in Oasis! That was too perfect that Beth did that at the end. I was not expecting it and it brought a chuckle to my lips during what was otherwise a very stressful scene. Come on, Chapter 34! Also, I forgot to mention, I absolutly loved the named baseball bats in Oasis! That was too perfect that Beth did that at the end. I was not expecting it and it brought a chuckle to my lips during what was otherwise a very stressful scene. Come on, Chapter 34!

]]> By: Shae http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11102 Shae Fri, 23 Apr 2010 18:38:47 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11102 Sure, I was just curious...I really like that the women that are forefront in these stories are not cream-puffs. I mean, yeah they have their weaknesses, but they all have core of strength that the situation tends to pull out of them. It is nice to see that in a supporting female character. Sure, I was just curious…I really like that the women that are forefront in these stories are not cream-puffs. I mean, yeah they have their weaknesses, but they all have core of strength that the situation tends to pull out of them. It is nice to see that in a supporting female character.

]]> By: Noah L http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11101 Noah L Fri, 23 Apr 2010 18:34:15 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11101 Stressful situations tend to strengthen emotions and...other things...so I think that it is perfectly normal for Corbin to have a growing attraction to London already. He is young, available, and stressed, and so is she. Stressful situations tend to strengthen emotions and…other things…so I think that it is perfectly normal for Corbin to have a growing attraction to London already. He is young, available, and stressed, and so is she.

]]> By: Bryce Beattie http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11100 Bryce Beattie Fri, 23 Apr 2010 18:01:12 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11100 Beth stayed with her injured dad back at the base. Who knows if we'll ever see her again... According to her note, she did have feelings for Corbin. And sure he was attracted to Beth. But nothing had a chance to really happen (did they ever even kiss- I can't remember...) and now Corbin's been thrown into a new fray. Thanks for reading & saying hi. Beth stayed with her injured dad back at the base. Who knows if we’ll ever see her again… According to her note, she did have feelings for Corbin. And sure he was attracted to Beth. But nothing had a chance to really happen (did they ever even kiss- I can’t remember…) and now Corbin’s been thrown into a new fray.

Thanks for reading & saying hi.

]]> By: Shae http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11099 Shae Fri, 23 Apr 2010 16:46:57 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11099 In the past two days, I have read all of Oasis and all that you have written of St. Laurent. I love the online serial format and am really excited be reading along as you write. Here is one question that has been burning in my mind...what happened to Beth? I though Corbin was in love with her, and now she is gone and he has moved on to London? Unless I am wrong, it has not been THAT long since the events in Oasis....other than that, great job and keep it up! In the past two days, I have read all of Oasis and all that you have written of St. Laurent. I love the online serial format and am really excited be reading along as you write. Here is one question that has been burning in my mind…what happened to Beth? I though Corbin was in love with her, and now she is gone and he has moved on to London? Unless I am wrong, it has not been THAT long since the events in Oasis….other than that, great job and keep it up!

]]> By: Tyler http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11076 Tyler Wed, 21 Apr 2010 23:48:54 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11076 (Many apologies for any grammatical/spelling mistakes or typos. I have just returned from the pub!! :)) (Many apologies for any grammatical/spelling mistakes or typos. I have just returned from the pub!! :) )

]]> By: Tyler http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/comment-page-1/#comment-11075 Tyler Wed, 21 Apr 2010 23:46:32 +0000 http://www.storyhack.com/2010/04/16/the-journey-of-st-laurent-chapter-33/#comment-11075 I have to agree, when you think about it. You have just had an attempt to steal the vials, you would want to keep it as secure and as near to you as possible. In the absence of a steel briefcase handcuffed to your person I reakon a velcro pocket is as good as any, I mean come on guy it isn't as if he shoved it in a bodily cavity for safekeeping! Sure there is an increased risk and sure Bryce has "poetic license" but still, what reader would believe that Corbs suddenly stumbled upon a pocket sized aircraft black box? Personally I would probably stop reading if things got that god damned riddiculous! On a happier note: Bryce I love how this has developed and that it is becoming apparent that Corbin can't even trust those that seem to want to fight with him. Seems much like a real life end of the world scenario, the only person you can truly trust is yourself. Also I like how London is becoming less of a "token female sidekick" and more of an integral part of Corbin's plans. But then again looking back we always knew this was going to happen with how you wrote about her when Corbin first met her. That and the fact she is a red-head which any man knows are the most firey of the lot!! Keep up the good work! Faithfully Tyler I have to agree, when you think about it. You have just had an attempt to steal the vials, you would want to keep it as secure and as near to you as possible. In the absence of a steel briefcase handcuffed to your person I reakon a velcro pocket is as good as any, I mean come on guy it isn’t as if he shoved it in a bodily cavity for safekeeping! Sure there is an increased risk and sure Bryce has “poetic license” but still, what reader would believe that Corbs suddenly stumbled upon a pocket sized aircraft black box? Personally I would probably stop reading if things got that god damned riddiculous!

On a happier note:
Bryce I love how this has developed and that it is becoming apparent that Corbin can’t even trust those that seem to want to fight with him. Seems much like a real life end of the world scenario, the only person you can truly trust is yourself. Also I like how London is becoming less of a “token female sidekick” and more of an integral part of Corbin’s plans. But then again looking back we always knew this was going to happen with how you wrote about her when Corbin first met her. That and the fact she is a red-head which any man knows are the most firey of the lot!!

Keep up the good work!
Faithfully
Tyler

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